I think marriage is important. I think marriage
should be between two people who love and care for each other. Of course, that
isn’t the way it always works. Some people get married for the wrong reasons.
That explains why divorce rates are so high. Some people get married so they
will receive the benefits of marriage. In some cultures, there are even
arranged marriages so some couples don’t have a choice. I agree that marriage
isn’t for everyone. Some people just aren’t ready to make such an important commitment
that could change their lives. Some people honestly don’t take marriage
seriously enough. Some people just marry so they can get out of their parent’s
home. That happened to a person I know and the marriage ended in a divorce
after of couple of years. Marriage isn’t a simple decision because it’s life
changing. I find it strange that in ancient Rome, a man wasn’t a citizen until
he was married. Just shows another way how different life is now. I find it
surprising that marriage cases went all the way to the Supreme Court. I had no
idea that there were four concepts of marriage that the court could decide. The
concepts make sense though. I like that marriage in the US is considered to be
unique. I’m not entirely sure where I stand on same sex marriages. Religiously,
I would be against it but morally I’m not so sure. I think it’s important to be
with the person you love. Marriage could be considered a right in searching for
the pursuit of happiness. The writer in the Reading America made
interesting points about same sex couples not having all the rights that other
marriages have. Honestly, I can’t really say if I’m for or against it. I haven’t
figured that out yet.
The ideas in The Little Seagull were helpful. The
clustering reminded me of the web for brainstorming that I learned years ago. The
information about paragraphs was interesting. I never thought to use an analogy
in my writings for English class. I never really used parallel structure. I
always had a hard time identifying it and fully understanding how to properly
use it.
I would organize a little better. Instead of saying "I think" continuously, go on to explain why you think. I believe you have the right idea, I just think that your phrasing and organization(paragraphs, etc.) would make your essay great!
ReplyDeleteI liked how you showed both aspects of how you viewed it morally and religiouslly. I thought that your last paragraph about the little Seagull handbook was a bit out of place. It didn't really have anything to do with what the rest of your blog was about.
ReplyDeleteYou had several great points about marriage at the beginning of your blog. I would have loved to hear a clearer definition of what you think marriage is, but as I read on I realized you didn't have a clear definition for yourself yet! I think it's good that you directly stated that you were unsure about where you stood about homosexual marriage. It helped me better understand where you are coming from! At some point, however, I would consider spending some time making a decision on where you stand.
ReplyDeleteI agree with the first comment. You used " I think" a lot, but it is a really good essay and the ideas are well presented.
ReplyDelete